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Sunday 20 March 2016

Ofa- Narrative Story- The Redmur School

Long time ago back when racism was still around and there was no technology. There was a school that was constructed on top of a very old cemetery. The school was called Redrum Primary School. The school was named Redmur because they wore black and red. There school was made out of mur. Mur was a brick. This school was named after a principal who committed suicide. No one knew that somebody a long time ago had committed suicide there. The Principal of the school Mr Dave hated children who would always send inappropriate stuff to his home mail box. Mrs Ross stayed at school late looking at her students science projects. One stormy rainy night a haze had covered the school and had changed everything in the school. Even the grass in the school had turned grey.

Problem
Tiava and her friend Ryan marched into their classroom. Tiava had spotted the grey grass as they were going to their classroom. They both got to their class and said good morning to Mrs Ross. They sat down for the bell to ring. Mrs Ross called over to Tiava to go to the office to get her bag. Mrs Ross didn’t want call Ryan over to get her bag because she knew that Ryan would not do the right thing. He would look in her bag and steal something. She was evil in the classroom. Tiava got given the key for Mrs Ross's office. Mrs Ross called Mr Dave that Tiava was coming. Mr Dave was happy. When Tiava got to the office she went to grab the bag but before she grabbed the bag she got captured by Mr Dave. Tiava saw her mother in another room full of pins. Tiava felt so sorry for her mum because all the hard work she had done and Tiava had now ended up here. Tiava got took into a room full of blood. She was forced from Mr Dave to drink the blood. Tiava took a sip and coughed. Mr Dave closed door and said to Tiava ‘’See you in five years’’. Tiava was yelling for help to get someone's attention to help her. Tiava’s stomach was empty and she was very thirsty. All she would drink was all the blood that she was covered in. Tiava wasn’t just sorry for his Mum. She was also sorry for the other children that had been staying here for nearly five years eating and drinking nothing. Tiava was thinking of a good plan to get her mum and other children out that had been captured for five years.

Resolution
As Tiava was thinking of a good plan she touched something bumpy and hard. As she pulled it out, it was a key. She remembered that Mrs Ross had gave her keys to her to get her bag. It had her car key, house key and the key for the cell. She stood up full of blood and unlocked the cage door of the cell and whispered a joke “5 years is very short’’. She unlatched her mum’s room and the other children's room. Mr Dave’s office was right next to their cells and if they all went to get help he would hear all of the noises. Tiava told them “You guys stay here, I will go and ask for help”. As he was sneaking past Mr Dave’s office she was thinking of someone who was helpful. Tiava wanted someone who was very helpful. She remembered that there was a police station just across their school. Tiava ran to the police station. When she got there she explained everything to the police. After she had explained to the police what had happened they came to the school and arrested Mrs Ross and Mr Dave. They ten years imprisonment for all the bad things they had done to the people and also to the children. A few days later the inspectors came to the school and they found out that the word Redrum name when you spell it backwards it spelt Murder School.

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