Oh, my goodness, Ofa, what a tragic story! It is so sad to think that people got hurt and that anyone would plan an attack like this at the Olympics. I think that you did a very good job of communicating the panic and upset that everyone would have been feeling if this story were to happen in real life. Thank goodness it is just imaginary!
First of all this story was really dramatic in a very good way. I thought this poem hooked me in. I also agree with Rachel hopefully it wasn't real because that would have been terrible. I think maybe you can change the layout for your fellow readers to see because they got to read this.
Hi Ofa I really like your ending part of the story. It was very exciting and interesting. I hope you keep up the great work you have been doing so far. Daniel
Oh, my goodness, Ofa, what a tragic story! It is so sad to think that people got hurt and that anyone would plan an attack like this at the Olympics. I think that you did a very good job of communicating the panic and upset that everyone would have been feeling if this story were to happen in real life. Thank goodness it is just imaginary!
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Hi Ofa
ReplyDeleteFirst of all this story was really dramatic in a very good way. I thought this poem hooked me in. I also agree with Rachel hopefully it wasn't real because that would have been terrible. I think maybe you can change the layout for your fellow readers to see because they got to read this.
By Mia-LS2
Well done ofa, This is a really integrity Ending story Poem. I really liked the words and phrases you have used.
ReplyDeleteGreat work Ofa
Mele-LS1
Hi Ofa
ReplyDeleteI really like your ending part of the story. It was very exciting and interesting. I hope you keep up the great work you have been doing so far.
Daniel