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Friday 29 December 2017

Summer Learning Journey - Week 2 - Day 4 - Bonus Activity

For this Summer Learning Journey I had to complete a story about working as a nurse on a large medical large ship in War. I have to write at least 8-10 sentences to completed the story. 

One day you are walking along the deck of the ship when you hear a loud bang. You start to run as you see smoke coming from the far end of the ship. You run towards the room where your patients are waiting to receive treatment from the doctor. Just as you arrive at the door to their room you hear another loud bang and you.....


One day you are walking along the deck of the ship when you hear a loud bang. You start to run as you see smoke coming from the far end of the ship. You run towards the room where your patients are waiting to receive treatment from the doctor. Just as you arrive at the door to their room you hear another loud bang and you scream. You are running to get help from other nurses but suddenly you hear a double bang. You scream as loud as a girl is happy on christmas day "someone help please". You see two of your other nurse friends running rapidly towards you like rhinos. Your friends and you quickly run to a safety spot. You suddenly hear a patient screaming "help please". You and your two nurse friends try get to the other side to help the patient. As you and your friends get to the room your patient is gone. You panick and fall to the ground. Suddenly you hear a bang noise from the room next to you. You and your friends quickly run to the next room and all you can see is fire on the patients bed. You and your nurse buddies try to smother the fire with a sheet. Luckily the fire stops and you and you friends are safe from the fire.

2 comments:

  1. Hi Ofa,

    Wow! What a great story! You've done a great job of completing the story that was provided on the Summer Learning Journey website. I feel as though there's still more to come which is a great way to finish!

    I love your use of a simile where you have said that your 'scream was as loud as a girl is happy on Christmas day'. That was my favourite sentence in your story. You must have a great imagination to come up with that. Well done!

    It would be very difficult to be one of the people on a war ship, I think. What do you think would be the hardest part?

    I look forward to reading more of your blog over the summer.
    Cheers,
    Ruby.

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  2. Hello Ofa
    Good job on finishing this summer learning journey activity. Your mini story sounds great and I like how you went over the limit (8-10 sentences). Well done Ofa!
    Daniel

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